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I wanted to be naked
So I took off all my clothes
And stood in front of the mirror
In pink underwear and black bra.
Wasn't enough.

I was still dressed,
Still perfectly decent.
I wanted to be naked.

I took off my bandanna,
My earrings,
Even the one that doesn't come off.
I took off my cuffs,
My rubber bracelets,
One at a time.
And dropped it all on the counter.

It still wasn't enough.
I still had the glitter of silver and black.
I wanted to be naked.

I peeled my nailpolish,
Chipping my nails in the process.
I took off my wrist chains,
Feeling my life leave along with them,
Feeling my wrist get lighter and lighter.
Goodbye Geneviève.
I wanted to be naked.

I looked at myself in the mirror
And it still wasn't enough.
There was more.

I scratched away at the scars
From my failed operation,
From my dislocation
From my wheelchair.
I tore them out and pulled the pain out with it.
I yanked the pain out of my head,
Migraines for sale.

I wanted to be naked.
Without clothes, jewelry
Or pain.
Hmmm. A sister obesession I have with my total silence one.

To do the things described in the first part would take me over 10 minutes because of the silver bracelets. They're extensive to remove. Geneviève is the mistake I fell in love with, once upon a time. She was a girl, to answer everyone.

Update: Fixed the typo. Thanks ~triptychr
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Given 2002-12-09
Stripping oneself in layers like an onion. I Wanted To Be Naked by ladygekko is a wonderful twist on introspection and expression. Please read! (Selected by ^faithwalker) ( Featured by faithwalker )
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Puffun Featured By Owner Jun 4, 2008
I kinda liked this, tho i woulda liked it better if it werent sorted in dark.
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fredfburger Featured By Owner May 13, 2008   Photographer
lovely!
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issamonster Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2003
I posted on this deviation a hell of a long time ago, back when it was still new. Back then my deviant name was devils-imp... I had forgotten that until I found this deviation today. My how dorky and ignorant I was then.

I did a search to find it. Of all the DA poems I've read over the past year or two, this is the one I remember most. Perhaps because it was the first poem I could understand on a deeper level. Thank you. Even a year after you submitted it, I still have to let you know that it's a great poem. :-)
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ladygekko Featured By Owner Dec 8, 2003
That really means a lot to me. Thank you so much. :love:

Kim.
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:iconissamonster:
issamonster Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2003
My pleasure. :) Keep writing.
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boobookittiefuck Featured By Owner Aug 31, 2003
jesus. *in awe*
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art-nouveau Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2003
shivering! love it! i really feel that my blood is stopped and freezed on my veins when i read your last 2 quatrain. keep it up.
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jessiquita Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2003  Hobbyist Photographer
This is beautiful.

Very expressive.

Good stuff. :) (Smile)
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bratchny Featured By Owner Dec 16, 2002
So descriptive...I like descriptive things. I can picture you taking off all your clothes, but still looking in the mirror, dissatisfied. I've felt that way. :) (Smile) and yeah, the second last verse about the scars, is really poignant. Has a real rhyming quality anout it..
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devils-imp Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2002
i loved the poem i was only scared like.....3 to 12 times while reading it...genevieve was really the scariest part in it but by saying that i feel like...racist in a way so ill shut up now... congrats on the dd. it really is a beautiful poem.
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spittle Featured By Owner Dec 11, 2002
I likes naked. Hee hee hee.
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:iconsicle9:
sicle9 Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2002
to bad its not that easy to let go of the pain...
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:iconkaizen:
kaizen Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2002
Nice way of expressing that desire.

It's eerie

The poem is leading people to believe there is something sexual within, but digs deeper than that.

:) (Smile) I enjoyed it.
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marvulusmordus Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2002
uummm.......i feel you.

Nice words.
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akashka Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2002  Hobbyist
nice work !!!! Clap i was not expecting the end, but totally understand it. Its beautiful.
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rebelchic Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2002
Wow. Extremely beautiful piece. I like the straight foward descriptions you used here. You showed the reader exactly what was happening while not losing a bit of the overall emotion.

Nice.
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piranha Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2002
amazing. Thumbs Up
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:iconkara:
kara Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2002
you excite me
and depress me
at the
same
time
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hustlaselassie Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2002
Very very nice work, a most enjoyable read
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syrus Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2002
hmm, interesting idea... if only we could scratch off the scars...
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:iconfae:
fae Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2002
I could relate to that in sooo many ways it scared me. Amazing job :) (Smile)

Horns Heart
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gouine Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2002
je pense pas avoir tout compris..mais ce que j'ais compris me plait enormement.. des fois je me sents comme ca aussi.. superbe texte... j'aime beaucoups ce que tu fais...
;-) (Wink)
je le prends en favorit
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rajivmathur Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002
just brilliant.
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:iconzaknafein:
zaknafein Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002   Writer
Very nice imagery, I'm impressed.
And wow, you made the daily deviations =) (Smile)
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sirensin Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002
beautiful. i like how you took the whole physically naked/emotionally naked idea and gave it a creative, new prespective. awesome job.
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water-elemental Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002   Writer
Sometimes, we wear our pain as symbols of pride. We flash to others the scars of our souls, so that they might see our suffering. Very well written. I didn't quite figure it out at first, but a good poem makes you read it twice...Well done!

~h2O
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paxtin Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002
:O (Eek) Intense...Congratz on the D.D.
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anomoli8 Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002
very expressive, and the words you picked fit the mood and the purpose. definately deserves the dd.

good work, and congrats.
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sexpistols Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002
amazing... i wish i could write like this.
untill that time has come i will just admire
other people. +fav
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gabrieli Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002
incredible work...really powerful.
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movie-wizard Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002   Photographer
A Day in the life of a woman? =D (Big Grin)
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cate Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002   Writer
I love to be naked... :-D. Great poem!
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Alicia-Hannah Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002
I love the detail you went into.. I especially love this part:
I peeled my nailpolish,
Chipping my nails in the process.
I took off my wrist chains,
Feeling my life leave along with them,
Feeling my wrist get lighter and lighter.
:) (Smile)
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bauron Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002
Hug You're great.

I liked the way you brought being naked across as both a physical and an emotional thing. I sometimes like to get physically naked, but the police don't like it too much Oops!
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lovelydeirdre Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002
True words. I've been there before. Not exactly there. I don't pretend to know your heart. But. . . you get the idea.

Creepy too-much-info add on: I'm wearing pink underwear and a black bra as I'm reading this. Well, and clothes. I'm hiding my pain again.
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ZirTuan Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002  Hobbyist Photographer
Nakid come from clearance of everything you wear and know, kind of hard to be completely nakid. Very nice, I like the poem very much.
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Bullet; Purple You just received LEO da DOMINICO's award.
Bullet; Purple [ 25x ]
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bob-x Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002
Being naked is amazingly nice. Being naked with others is even nicer... but only if they aren't measuring and weighing you, or you them. It's a feeling of openess, honesty and trust. It's amazing. Then again, I don't thank that that is at all what you were talking about in this poem.

I think I'm going to go live in a nudist colony. Wanna come with?
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m4tik Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002  Professional Photographer
very great, much emotion in there, i love the end, sensual though, make me feel despaired :| (Blank Stare)
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jarnoid Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002
i like it really much. the last line made an impact on me. i had to read it again. love this poem.
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calivinguy Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002
We all wanna be naked sometimes... though mine's more of a perverted obsession.

Very well written. Yet again, you push our understanding of our world to a new level. You intricately spin a web of reality, the real reality, and confront us in our choice of what to truly believe. In short, I like this. It's very cool. And I "know" what genevieve is, I just don't know what it is.
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triptychr Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002  Hobbyist Writer
Did you mean to write "I looks at myself in the mirror?"

Still, very well done. Is Genevieve a city?
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kupi Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002
You have such a moving way with words...
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:iconpsyko:
psyko Featured By Owner Dec 9, 2002
very powerful. i remember when you wrote about bein in the wheelchair.
nicely written poem, i think it might've moved me. wow.
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