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No means no means no;
That\'s what the pamphlet told me.
I still smell like him.
Rhythm is a little off, but I kinda like it like that. Had Trip check it out beforehand (I love his haikus) just to make sure I wasn't submitting a Flaming Piece of Shit.

I had a really bad date today. Really really bad.
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katakittieks Featured By Owner Dec 14, 2014
Been there..... Also, I appreciate your seemingly minimalist approach to the whole thing... In contrast to everyone else's drivel-ing on & on about this sort of thing all the time, which doesn't seem to help anyone get over it any faster.....
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Poshu Featured By Owner Nov 18, 2007
this is amazing... you summed it all up in so few words....
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ZmanzDaOnlyMan4Me Featured By Owner Dec 10, 2006   Writer
You express so much in a few amazing lines. I really love this. :hug: and I sympathize. I am sorry you had such a terrible experience.
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Lucylover13 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2005
:worry: :( :( :worry:

Thinking of you....
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ladygekko Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2005
Strangely enough, I saw him on the bus today... I was with my current boyfriend and I held him tightly.
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Lucylover13 Featured By Owner Mar 23, 2005
I hope you are doing well now. Keep your chin up and use the cathartic release of writing. :hug:
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tatyana Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2003
Oh dear, oh dearohdearohdear


Wonderful things haikus, seventeen syllables that say it all and more.

If this wasn't such a horrible topic, it would almost be amusing, I know its terrible to say that - its just the bluntness of it really evokes something almost nervous in my stomach. Makes me want to smile, though I'm not sure its a pleasurable sensation.
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fauxgravity Featured By Owner Jan 25, 2003

Emotion searing through so few words. +sympathy. +admiration. +fav.
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kara Featured By Owner Jan 24, 2003
*nods*
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dougans Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2003
was this the "not gay" geek?

ow man, i wished you the best of luck for that.
you didnt sound like you were looking foward to it anyway.
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fayde Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2003  Hobbyist General Artist
:( (Sad)
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childofministry Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2003
Someone should make that into a billboard or something. Very short, and very very very good.
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backwords Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2003
LOL
i guess you will need another shower, eh?
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spittle Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2003
One of those poems where what it DOESN'T say is what most affects the reader.
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realfunfuneral Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2003
Great impact from this. Very unfortunate circumstances behind it though. Sounds like the guy needed the sharp end of a high heeled shoe smashing in on his skull. But then again i'm not very lenient with people like that. Hope its ok now though. Hug
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akashka Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2003  Hobbyist
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i need to read ur journal entry i think.
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calivinguy Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2003
I really like this,
it touches me way down deep,
I guess I'm the poem.
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sfmoe Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2003  Professional Photographer
:( (Sad) Hug sorry
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triptychr Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2003  Hobbyist Writer
Oh good, everyone seems to like it so far. I was worried I may have given you Flaming Piece of Shit adivce! ;) (Wink)
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psyko Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2003
i'm glad that i read your journal before hand.
sorry that this happened, but the haiku is pretty cool.
god, i have to go write now.
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sirensin Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2003
[winces] i'm sorry. i hope it didn't get as bad as the title. do something nice and evil if you ever see this guy again, like slash his tires :P (Lick) *ahem* just kidding. really. ahem. Devilish

it's a good haiku though. haiku's are hard to pull of, they're so damn short! but this one definetly packs a punch, which is what haiku's usually lack, effect.
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alana Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2003
Unfg, if I hadn't read your most recent journal entry I would have been muchly confuzzled.

I especially like the first line. Repetition is goot. Yeah, the rhythm is a bit strange, but strange in a good way. I likes it.

And yeah, sucks to be you after that horrible date. If I were you, I would have bashed the crap out of him. Or at least slapped him really hard or something.
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zaknafein Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2003   Writer
I like it.... very striking... hehe.
I suck at Haikus. And this does not.
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phixion Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2003   Writer
THAT bad? Ew...I'm sorry. Hug
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